revision of essay 2

I want a revision for my first draft paper about women power.

I want the essay be more specific on how women have impacts in the society and uses more detail events or movements to support the ideas.

The essay now is too general and have too much topics to talk about.

*Women improving conditions to contribute in the economy

*Womenâ€™s role in the economy

ex. Company that leads by woman about hiring women women power

Social Science aspect, women in workplace and economy

WW II Industrial revolution, work force, U.S women were forced to go to work, self sufficient

Very difficult when men returned

Also, needs to include Justin Trudeau’s speach from Davos, talking about women in workplaces

Avoid Feminism Topics and change them.