cohensive writing
ENGL 110
Cohesion Practice
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Instructions: After watching the video lecture on cohesion (https://screencast-o-matic.com/watch/cbQFqFIYDC) , use the “known-new contract†and clear terminology to revise the following passages.
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Passage 1, original:
The crucial importance of language skills in children’s problem solving ability was stressed by Jones (1985) in his classic paper on children’s thinking. Improvement in non-verbal problem solving occurred as a result of improvements in language skills. It was suggested in that paper that use of previously acquired language habits for problem articulation and activation of knowledge previously learned through language was the sources of better performance. Therefore, systematic practice in the verbal formulation of non-linguistic problems prior to attempts at their solution might be an avenue for exploration in the enhancement of problem solving in general.
Passage 1, your rewrite:
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Passage 2, original:
The power to create and communicate a new message to fit a new experience is not part of the power of animals in their natural states. Their genetic code imposes on them only what they can communicate. Information in regard to distance, direction, source richness, in regard to pollen, constitutes the total information content which can be communicated by bees. The same limited repertoire of messages delivered over and over in the same way, for generation after generation, is characteristic of animals of the same species, in all significant respects, in fact.
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Passage 3, original:
There is a growing resistance to allowing the construction of new mental health outpatient facilities in residential areas. Concern about declines in property values and the loss of tax base property are mentioned most frequently, but a distrust, founded on the notion that the few notorious examples of supervisory failures represent the rule rather than the exception, complicates this problem even further. An extensive campaign to change these perceptions is necessary at this point, in our opinion. At the moment, a figure of approximately $1 million is our best estimate for the cost of such a campaign.
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